What are your thoughts on this poem?
Thanks to everyone who answered my last question! Here's a different poem:
Ticonderoga, Televisions and
birdseed easters we never celebrated
socks with tiny embroidered hearts
long-forgotten antiquities
of a family's
bruised knees
I've got
shallow eyes
painted red, god knows when
and my shallow eyes
will never see
black and gold again.
my bruised knees are
forever glued to porcelain skin.
I've unbuttoned
acid wash jeans, but saw nothing
only the ruins
of legs that once stood strong.
vanished, with the comet
and the greedy fire
which stole too much
death takes it's form, pinning the sun onto dead skin.
floral curtains, up in smoke
um anyone wanna answer?
oh lord.............this is a burn victim describing what he's lost and what he has left......the red skin of his eyes, (he might even be blinded), his burned up legs by a fire that took too much and finally saying that death comes in many forms, sometimes while we're still living a life.
It's an amazingly descriptive write actually. The more you read it, the more you are pulled into the horror of what is being suffered in the aftermath. A most descriptive write on an awful tragedy in this life...being a burn victim. Wonderfully done and certainly rates a 10 in my book.
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